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You say I`m cold.
You say I don`t want to be friends.
You say I keep to the shadows.
You say I don`t like people.
You say I`m weird.

I`m not cold, I`m shards of a person.
I`d love to be friends, but I`m scared.
I keep to the shadows to stay out of sight.
I like people but I can`t trust them.
I`m different.

Would you be warm if you`d been broken?
Would you be friendly if stabbed in the back?
Would you walk in light if darkness surrounded you?
Would you like people who made you want to die?
Would you be different?

Before you judge, make an effort to see.
Surfaces have depths, people have sadness beneath.
My latest poem. Feedback would be majorly appreciated. :D
EDIT: Fuck me. This has got way more views than I was expecting O.o
Big glomps to all who faved/commented :)
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:iconinnocenceofourhearts:
InnocenceOfOurHearts Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
it's simply amazing what you created here..it's so so deep. i'm stunned..and can't find the right words...i wanna hug youHeart Heart Heart 
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N4NSHE Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
you has touched a sore spot.
=)
i like this text.
it's true for me.
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:iconunisis-2-in-1-beauty:
Unisis-2-in-1-beauty Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014  Student General Artist
you described perfectly this being that i refer to as me.
merci for this :)
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for your lovely comment and I`m glad you liked it. :D
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:iconunisis-2-in-1-beauty:
Unisis-2-in-1-beauty Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Student General Artist
you are most welcome! ^-^
(you deserved it)
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:iconlightningwing1234:
Lightningwing1234 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Student Artist
wow....
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :D
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:iconlightningwing1234:
Lightningwing1234 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Student Artist
Welcome!
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:3
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:iconlightningwing1234:
Lightningwing1234 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Student Artist
=3
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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:iconpctomgirl:
pctomgirl Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
this describes me so well it's actually freaking me out...Sweating a little... 
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
XD That was the plan :evillaugh:
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:iconpctomgirl:
pctomgirl Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I'm gonna go hide now......
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:iconyaminekoyami:
yaminekoyami Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2013
Just like me /sigh/ my family always judge me and make fun of me because im anti-social and they even take me to therapy because of it
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:iconcaptainfalcon21:
CaptainFalcon21 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
High school in a nutshell... :/
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Same for me.
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:iconagirlintherain:
AGirlintheRain Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
So good. I can really connect to this....
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :D
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:iconrunswithbooks:
RunsWithBooks Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013
Reminds me of my little sister. I wish you the best. <3
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :D
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the-real-Err0r Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
I didnt think there was a way out this really intrigued me I am headed right for the top no pressure just check it out
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconnomemeplz:
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Rachel-am-97 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i love to write poetry, and have quite a few poems of my own on my profile. i just wanted to stop by and say that this poem is amazing, your truely talented.
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! I`ll check out your poems too :D
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Rachel-am-97 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
aw thank you! they are in my featured folder ^.^
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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NuMetalWolf Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You know what's ironic? When people live in a place with so many critic and concerned persons, and they just want to be free.. While some live in a place where they're apparently free, and all they need is someone who cares for them.. One thing is right: Love and Freedom are both good things, they just can't walk together, though.. Freedom gives you individualism, and even solitude; Love gives you care and concern, which traps you very often..
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Matreon Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love it! There are so many people I want to read this. So that they can somewhat understand why people choose to be invisible.
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much :D
This made my day.
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tagged-in-scars Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:glomp:
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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DarkLover33 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   Writer
I really like this. Awesome job.
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :D
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:icondarklover33:
DarkLover33 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   Writer
your welcome! :)
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:iconaliwyn:
Aliwyn Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
So beautiful! :D
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
In other words, don't judge a book by its cover. It's a cliché that has been around since the dawn of time, but needless to say, it's expressed very well here.

And maybe it's strange, but this poem, combined with your username, really allows the effect of this poem to hit home. You present two sides to the story, and present it with a kind of flair.

So, with all that said, great work, and hope to see more! :clap:
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
Very relatable.
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9-11-00 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this=me
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ThelVadum Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
Speaks to the soul, man, speaks to the soul.
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :D
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:iconnhizyr:
Nhizyr Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I like this poem in combination with your user icon.
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! Your icon is cool too :D
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Ani-Eimi Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:clap: Very nice! Beautiful poem. :+fav: :heart:
I particularly enjoy this one because I can relate.
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AlbertoFalken Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
An excelent poem and it feels like if its describing the way some of us feels :)
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :D
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DarkTheHedgehog117 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm.... Mesmerized by this lovely piece of... Art. :iconrainbowdashcryingplz:
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks :D
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DarkTheHedgehog117 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're SO Welcome!!! :iconso-awesomeplz:
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:iconyinandyang2011:
YinandYang2011 Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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